lunes, 24 de octubre de 2011

Trip to Chicago

Outline

I. - Introduction

- Trip of five weeks

-Stay with family

- This trip was loaded with experiences and sightseeing

II. - Body

1. - Lake Michigan

-Shore

-Immensity

-Cool water

2.-Navy Pier

-Ferris Wheel

-Fire works

3. - Sky deck

-Highest building

-Balcony made of glass

III. - Conclusion

The amazing trip to Chicago started before I took the plane. I had to earn every shining small coin that arrived to my pocket to finance this adventure in a new country. During five eternal weeks I was a foreigner in this windy city. I stayed with a very kind and united family, the family of my mom’s sister, but at the same time was a strange family for my brother and me. This incredible this trip was loaded with unimaginable experience and striking sightseeing, like Lake Michigan, Navy Pier, and Sky deck.

The first place that I wanted to know was the Michigan Lake. I asked my aunt if we could visit this emblematic place of Chicago, and I did not have to ask it twice. My aunt, cousins, brother, and I traveled during twenty minutes by the driveway. When we arrived to the city, we passed next to the lake and the first impression was immensity dressing blue. We had to walk during twenty minutes to arrive to the artificial beach. When I was looking at the lake I removed my dirty sneakers and I walked above the silky and white sand. I stand for a couple of minutes at the shire of the lake because I was looking at that clean and blue water. Finally, I decided to get in the lake but when my finger toe touched the water I regretted immediately, the water was not cool, it was freezing.

The second place that was one of the most amazing during the trip was Navy Pier. This place was very crowded and you could see people every where. This place was like a combination of a dock and an amusement park. We walked along all Navy Pier and we could enjoy the big lake, refreshing lemonade and a windy and cool evening. We bought tickets for the Ferris wheel. This ride was relaxing and you had two beautiful views, on the right side was the city of Chicago and on the left was the lake. When the ride finished we walked to choose a good place to observe the fire works. At 9: 30, a ship stopped in the middle of the lake just in front of my eyes, and the show started. During twenty minutes I was astonished, the explosion sounded next to my ears and the smell of the sulphur was the perfect complement. This show was full of different colors and shapes.

The third place and the most extraordinary place that I loved in Chicago was the Sky deck, this is the highest building in Chicago and it has 103 floors. This building is one of the most visited places in Chicago. The last floor, a touristic place, shows a 180° view, in other words, you can appreciate the city from north to south and from east to west. The most stunning of this building was a balcony made of glass. When I reached this balcony I got frozen, I have to say that I was not scared I was in shock , I felt I was flying above this gorgeous city.

This trip was one of the most important experiences that would be conserved on my mind and heart for the rest of my life, not only because I could visit amazing sightseeing but also I met my family. I saw a lot of places built by men and nature places that I never imagined. This city is an excellent place to spend holidays.

4 comentarios:

  1. Dear Ceci,

    It´s good to see that you have uploaded yor Descriptive Essay. There are just a few corrections to be done.

    Cheers!

    Mtro. Armando

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  2. Dear Ceci,

    Have you already sent your comments to your partner Karla?

    Mtro. Armando

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  3. *22 years (I WOULD WRITE DOWN IN LETTERS).
    *I started to breathe (REMEMBER TO USE "ING" AFTER THE VERB "START") (BREATHE is without letter "e".)
    *the city of the quarry (DO NOT WRITE DOWN "THE")
    *I have spent my childhood, teenage and part of my young adult (YOU MEAN ADOLESCENCE instead of teenage and also YOUNG ADULTHOOD instead if young adult)
    *Those kids were my cousins and together, we used to spend our Sunday afternoons in that yard. (WORD ORDER...Those kids were my cousins and we used to spend every Sunday afternoon together in the yard.)
    *We always were playing games and making competences of boys vs. girls (WE WERE ALWAYS PLAYING GAMES AND MAKING COMPETENCES BETWEEN BOYS AND GIRLS).
    *The days in the aquatic park were full of sun and heat. I used to go with my family and after swimming in all the pools we used to eat ham sandwiches. (THE DAYS IN THE AQUATIC PARK WERE SUNNY AND WARM. I USED TO GO THERE WITH MY FAMILY AND AFTER SWIMMING, WE USED TO EAT HAM SANDWICHES)
    *My young adult (MY ADULTHOOD)
    *When I finished high school, I decided study (I DECIDED TO STUDY)
    *Even though I learned a lot of interesting things related with food, met two of my best friends, and had a good time in Zacatecas city, I realized that it was not my style of living and finally, I decided to move to Aguascalientes city to study ELT. I have always thought that the fate puts you in the correct place and that is the reason because of I am where I am. (EVEN THOUGH I LEARNED A LOT INTERESTING THINGS RELATED TO FOOD, I MET TWO PEOPLE WHO ARE MY BEST FRIENDS AND I HAD FUN WITH THEM IN ZACATECAS CITY. I REALIZED THAT LIVING IN ZACATECAS CITY WAS NOT MY STYLE SO I DECIDED TO MOVE TO AGUASCALIENTES CITY TO STUDY BA. In ELT. I HAVE ALWAYS THOUGHT THAT FATE PUTS YOU IN THE CORRECT PLACE AND THIS IS WHY I AM WHERE I AM
    *The time flies and in 24 hours the future becomes present. (TIME FLIES).
    *My plans for the future are die in peace, and I only would die in peace if I felt fulfilled. (MY PLANS FOR THE FUTURE ARE DIED IN PEACE) (Ceci, what do you mean with that sentence?), AND I WOULD ONLY DIE IN PEACE IF IFELT FULFILLED.)
    *I am the kind of person who works hard for getting what I really want and the first step to feel me fulfilled is finish my career. (I AM THE KIND OF PERSON WHO WORKS HARD TO GET WHAT I WANT. IF I FINISH MY CARRER, I WILL FULFILLED MY DREAM OF BEING A TEACHER).
    *Then, I would like to start working, I would like to save money to support myself and save money for the things I want. (THEN, I WOULD LIKE TO START WORKING AND SAVING MONEY TO SUPPORT MYSELF AND ALSO, I WANT TO SAVE MONEY TO BUY MY PERSONAL THINGS.)
    *Also, I would like to start a master degree to be a well prepared professional person and do good deeds for my community. (I WOULD LIKE TO START STUDYING A MASTER DEGREE IN ORDER TO BE WELL PREPARED AS A TEACHER AND ALSO I WANT TO DO GOOD DEEDS TO THE SOCIETY).
    *I have lived 22 years. (I HAVE LIVED FOR 22 YEARS)
    *There are a lot of things that can happen in 22 years. (THERE ARE A LOT OF THINGS THAT HAVE HAPPENED DURING MY 22 YEARS ALIVE)
    *I have done a lot of things and I need and want to do more. (I HAVE DONE A LOT OF THINGS AND I NEED TO DO MORE).
    My life has given me good moments, persons, and experiences to remember, but also it has given to me bad things, and with out these bad things life would not be life, because bad things make us stronger and they prepared us for the next events. I thank God because He has given me 22 years of life and I ask Him for more years. (LIFE HAS GIVEN ME GOOD EXPERIENCES AND PEOPLE TO REMEMBER; HOWEVER, IT HAS GIVEN ME BAD THINGS AND WITHOUT THOSE BAD EXPERIENCES, LIFE WOULD NOT BE LIFE BECAUSE BAD THINGS MAKE US STRONGER AND THEY PREPARE US FOR NEXT EVENTS IN OUR LIVES. I THANK GOD BECAUSE HE HAS GIVEN ME THE CHANCE TO LIVE DURING THOSE YEARS AND I ASK HIM FOR MANY, MANY YEARS KEEPING ME ALIVE).
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  4. Ceci, those are the correction I suggested you to do in the word document, I know it's too long, but I considered as feedback. I think you really achieved a great essay description even though you need to check it in order to correct what I consider wrong. :)
    Thank's for looking at my essay, too. I already checked it :)

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